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WitherdRose
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Behind these black eyes Sep 15 2008, 07:22 AM

Well this is my second poem; its not one of my best but its easy to understand and really hits home on the issue at hand. Pretty girl mets Handsome boy, Hand in Hand they shall destroy, Dreams shall be shattered, Tears shall run, Hearts will be broken, For this is no fun, She gets paronoid, He gets mad, She raises her voices, He raises his hand, She says stuff she shouldn't say, Then on the floor she shall lay, For he has hit her with such might, As her blood is shead tonight, He says sorry, She screams get away, He says it was a mistake, She says it's to late, But in the morning all is well, Apperently she bumped her head and fell, But behind the smiles she shall always fear, That she shall shead another tear, please tell me what you think :D

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sinister-kisses
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Sep 16 2008, 10:06 AM

wow i love it. its incredible. it really does express the issue well

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Sep 16 2008, 02:58 PM

i like it....its very good

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xXeMoRaCeRXx
Posts: 18353

Sep 17 2008, 12:38 PM

In my opinion it's very good, but I'm not keen on the first line "Pretty girl mets Handsome boy". Not sure why, but there you go.

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WitherdRose
Posts: 1459

Sep 18 2008, 11:45 PM

well thanks for your honesty

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